The One-Timers all things

Gillian Anderson appeared in more episodes of The X-Files than anyone else, and her contributions to the character of Dana Scully and the chemistry of MSR are innumerable. As a writer, however, she’s a one-timer, and in this final installment of my One-Timers series I look at the development of her script for all things.

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all things, written by Gillian Anderson. She is also a one-timer director for this episode. I have the production draft (2/14/00), gold revision with story boards (3/1/00), salmon revision (3/28/00), and final (4/28/00).

Gillian said in her commentary track for the episode that the script she initially handed in was 72 pages long, with only the first three acts written. By comparison, the final script, with all four acts, was 55 pages. So the script needed some trimming. She worked closely with Chris Carter and Frank Spotnitz during the rewrite stage. The goal was to keep the healing and spiritual elements of the story in tact, while making it fit within the mandatory time slot. Spotnitz said he helped Gillian distill her ideas, and Carter said in the end, the script was all Gillian. (Shapiro, The Official Guide to The X-Files, volume 6). This was clear to me in reading the various revisions. The story and descriptions didn’t change. The scenes were just pared down to their essence.

The script starts with this description in the teaser, which I absolutely love: “What little light there is seems to dance and sway from above. [Scully] looks straight at us, with an ever-so-slight, peaceful smile.”

And then this: “Moonlight, broken by a tangle of branches pressing against a window. Scully bends to pick up her jacket….Her eyes are fixed on something o.s. We HOLD ON her there for just a beat, before she leaves frame. As she does, CAMERA DRIFTS across the room to a BED. Finding a naked thigh in a mass of crumpled blankets, then a BARE ARM…finally settling on a FACE: MULDER. Asleep. HOLD on this image, as we hear a door close in the b.g….”

Gillian said in the commentary that when she first wrote the story, it did not hint at the fact that Mulder and Scully spent the night together. But Spotnitz said it would be a good idea to imply that change in their relationship, at this point in the season, and it might be possible to add it into the script. That’s how the teaser came about. 

Scully’s voice over in the teaser was written later. Of the scripts I read, it first appeared in the salmon revision.

Moby’s “The Sky is Broken” is written into the script from the first draft. As is the clicking and tapping etc. to the rhythm of the music. Gillian said in the commentary that she wanted a continuation of rhythmic sound throughout the episode, with the first hint being the dripping water in the teaser.

I find it interesting that, just as David wrote Scully out of much of The Unnatural, Gillian sent Mulder away in her script. Even so, both episodes start and end with some of the most beloved MSR scenes of the entire series, demonstrating how well these actor/writers know the chemistry they share.

Gillian said she chose crop circles for Mulder to investigate because it was important for whatever it was that took him away from Scully to tie into the journey she was going through. 

It was also important to show Mulder and Scully at odds, to juxtapose her relationship with Waterston. In the end though, it’s actually her relationship with Mulder that helps guide her down her spiritual path. 

I love this description: After Scully questions what Mulder could learn from the crop circle investigation, “Scully feels guilty, but the damage is done. Silence now, as Mulder sets down the remote, gathers his things. Scully’s too prideful to speak up. Her impulse is to assuage, but can’t find it in herself.”

Not only does it set up the conflict, but it shows Gillian’s deep familiarity with the character, something few other writers (and no other one-timers) could approach.

In the scene where Mulder is in his apartment packing and calls Scully on speakerphone, we have this note: “The TV is playing, hopefully some legitimate black and white movie or soap opera with a man saying to a woman ‘You’re breaking my heart.’” Gillian said in the commentary that producer Paul Rabwin was able to find this for her.

My question is who is this referencing? Mulder? Daniel? Both? Whose heart is Scully breaking? I like that it could work for either of them.

When Scully first sees Waterston, “She stands for a moment, just taking him in, waves of memory and history washing over her.” 

As I read the script I wonder whether, and for how long, Gillian had this backstory in mind prior to writing it. Did it inform her portrayal of Scully in previous episodes?

“Daniel grabs her hand. Scully’s surprised by the familiarity. But after a measured exhale and a gentle smile, the strangeness dissipates. She allows him her hand and sits.”

The descriptions of Scully’s actions and reactions throughout the script are so beautifully detailed. It’s as if Gillian was thinking about how she would play each scene as she wrote it.

At the end of Act One, Scully and Daniel talk about why she left. Here’s part of that conversation in the production draft: 

Gillian said in the commentary that there was so much dialogue in the script, which was filmed, that had to be taken out. She had to cut almost ten minutes in the editing process to fit the time slot, and doing so affected the story. Originally, she didn’t want to imply that Scully and Waterston actually had an affair. In her story, they were getting close to having an affair, but because he was married, Scully ended it and left town. That’s when she went to Quantico. But with the way the story was pared down, most of the details were omitted, and the audience was left with the impression there was an affair.

What was most important to Gillian was making the relationship complicated. She wanted to show Waterston as someone Scully was attracted to, his intelligence, a certain sexiness, their history. And those things can seem like enough in a relationship. But she wanted to show that if Scully pays attention to the lessons she’s going through in the episode, she’ll realize that those things aren’t enough, that she doesn’t have to settle. 

Gillian writes Mulder as very annoying. So glad these snide comments were deleted:

And this whole scene was cut too:

Here’s how Gillian describes Colleen’s house. I love the intricate details:

There’s a long conversation between Scully and Colleen about holistic healing, pain as a gift, chakras, guilt and shame. Gillian said in the commentary that she felt bad most of Colleen’s dialogue was exposition. Originally she wanted Scully to run into Colleen in Chinatown and have a more natural conversation as they walked together. But time didn’t allow that, and this exposition-heavy conversation was the only way to fit the information necessary to move the story forward into the episode.

Then, when Colleen tells Scully “Everything happens for a reason” there’s this note: “There it is, beautiful in its simplicity.” So well-said, Gillian.

There’s a whole scene in the production draft where Scully goes to an apothecary in Chinatown. A doctor looks at Scully’s tongue and tells her she has a heavy heart, a weak immune system, and a closed mind. She sells Scully some tea, saying her body will be happy. The scene was cut, although we do see Scully making tea when she’s back in her apartment, and then she makes Mulder tea at the end. Could it be the same tea?

In the production draft, Scully tells Daniel in their final encounter that she got her ideas about healing from her partner at the FBI. Daniel says, “Well, then your partner’s had a delusionary influence on you.” Scully responds, “No. He’s had a great impact.” This exchange was deleted. Instead, as Gillian said in the commentary, this scene becomes the defining moment for Scully, where as a result of paying attention and listening to her own heart and her own needs, she’s able for the first time to stand up to Waterston. I really like that Mulder was taken out of this conversation. It shows Scully taking ownership of what’s right for her, rather than following a path set by anyone else. She chooses her own path. And in the end, that path includes Mulder.

The final scene at Mulder’s apartment, the precursor to what we saw in the teaser, was still To Be Written in the production draft.

The scene, as it appears in the episode, was finalized by the pink revision (2/22/00). It includes some lovely script notes: 

“The mood is warm, quiet. A long way from where our story began.” I interpret this as referring to the tension in the office at the start of Act One, not the bedroom in the teaser. 

Mulder “raising an eyebrow at the uncharacteristic Scully” when she suggests there are signs along the way that lead to the one choice. Then, when Scully doesn’t challenge Mulder’s comment that every choice would lead to this very moment, “Mulder looks at his tea as if it contains something hallucinogenic.” I love how Gillian builds these humorous gestures into the script. It’s the kind of unspoken banter that feels so natural between these characters. Unfortunately, they didn’t actually make it on screen.

And finally, when Mulder sees that Scully has fallen asleep, “He pushes a lock of hair back that’s fallen in her face. Leaning toward her now, as if he might kiss her…but reaching past her and grabbing a blanket that rests on the sofa’s arm. Pulling it over her gently. He studies her for another moment, considering. Then he gets up and exits frame. WE HOLD on Scully. FADE OUT.”

This is a nice place to leave them.

The One-Timers part 3

Members of the Family

This group includes episodes by people connected with the production, but not previously as writers. They had the advantage of knowing the characters and how the show works, which the Early On one-timers and even some of the Staff Writers lacked. The episodes covered in this post are Wetwired, Demons, Trevor, En Ami, and Rm9. Although all things is part of this category as well, I’m saving that episode for last, and it will be in a separate post.

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First up, Wetwired. Written by Mat Beck, visual effects coordinator on the show. I have the blue revision (4/3/96) and the green revision (4/9/96). The script was heavily rewritten by John Shiban, Vince Gilligan, and Frank Spotnitz. So much so that they worked an amalgamation of their names, “John Gillnitz” into the script. They would do that throughout the series, but this was the first time.

The first thing I noticed was that some of the iconic moments from the episode didn’t seem to be scripted: Mulder flopping down on the sofa in Scully’s motel room while they’re talking about the effects of TV, Mulder riding the exercise bike at the house while they’re investigating, Mulder fiddling with his tie when he tells the Gunmen he’s colorblind. It struck me that these scenes as written were dialogue-heavy with little to no action. These were examples of the director, Rob Bowman, bringing the script to life.

Next, I noticed that the script notes describing the characters’ thoughts and feelings were very emotional, going deeper than I typically see in a script. It was kind of beautiful. The whole thing sort of read like fanfic. So I thought this is either Mat Beck’s writing style, or JS VG FS saw it as an opportunity to let their feelings flow, in a script that doesn’t bear their names. 

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Demons, written by R.W. Goodwin. I read the yellow revision (4/13/97) and the goldenrod (4/17/97). I also have the white shooting schedule (4/10/97). Goodwin was the executive producer during the Vancouver era and usually directed the first and last episodes of the season. But this is the only episode he wrote. When I met him at Philefest, he said he loved getting to do Demons, but trying to write a show that you’re producing is like a doctor trying to operate on himself.

From the shooting schedule I learned that scenes with Amy Cassandra’s sister were deleted. They seem to be part of Scully’s investigation while Mulder was in jail. There was also at least one scene with Scully on her phone while driving. And the final scene would have been Mulder and Scully on a park bench at the Mall in DC, talking about holes in Mulder’s memory. These scenes don’t appear in the yellow revision, dated 4/13/97, so they were cut prior to the first day of shooting, 4/15/97. But the goldenrod revision (4/17/97) was done after shooting started. I would really love to see some earlier versions of this script!

I love this script note: “Mulder comes out of the bathroom (wearing either his pants or a towel, whichever he prefers)”. Knowing the actors as he did, Goodwin must have known David would choose the towel, but it was nice of him to give Mulder options.

And this: “Mulder gets up in gentle defiance of Scully”

I won’t include pictures of all of them but there are a lot of script notes/details that show familiarity with these characters:

  • Off Scully’s extreme impatience with Mulder…
  • Mulder and Scully exchange a look, hers a warning…
  • Off Scully’s fear for her partner, for his condition and possibly his guilt…
  • Mulder is hip to [Detective] Curtis and his techniques…
  • Mulder closes his eyes, suffering from his own inability to explain…
  • Mulder catching sight of something off-screen. Scully is entering the room…
  • Scully studies Mulder. All the fight is gone from him…
  • Scully shakes her head, exasperated by Mulder, by her inability to explain more…
  • Scully nods, reading Mulder’s aching conviction to find the truth…
  • He is not to be stopped. But Scully inches toward him anyway, against all good judgment…

In the episode Mulder makes an O.J. Simpson joke when he’s listing all the evidence against him. That’s not in either of the scripts I have. It was likely added during filming, quite likely ad-libbed by David.

A scene is added in the goldenrod version showing the officer’s actions right before he shoots himself. It clarifies what was happening somewhat. The officer is named Michael Fazekas. There is a TV writer/producer named Michele Fazekas, who started her career as a production assistant on The X-Files. That’s the name Frank Spotnitz gives to the local PD officer in Detour. Odds are both characters were named after this PA.

This is very interesting. In these versions of the script, when Mulder accuses his mother of betraying his father, she denies it, saying “I was faithful.” When Mulder presses her, she turns to walk away, but he grabs her. She DOES NOT slap him.

I can’t imagine Mulder grabbing his mother without provocation. It would seem out of character, given their previous interactions that we’ve seen and what we know about Mulder. It’s easier to understand after Teena slaps him though, with the heightened emotions. Teena’s slap is believable under the circumstances too. I don’t subscribe to the theory that Teena abused Mulder physically. I think her abuse was more of an emotional abandonment (I’ve written a whole blog post about that https://myxfilesobsession.home.blog/2019/03/30/in-defense-of-teena-mulder/). To me the scene plays out as Mulder finally giving up on getting answers from his mother.

The scripts also contain a deleted scene between Scully and Teena after Mulder ditches Scully at his mother’s house. We would have learned some surprising back story: Mulder had petit mal seizures until about age 12.

Imagine the implications! Was it epilepsy? Or was he being abducted, like Max? Apparently this was a path the mythology creators didn’t want to go down, because the idea was killed here and never revived in any later episode.

In the script, when she confronts him in the Quonochontaug house, Mulder fires the gun toward Scully but into the wall behind her. In the episode we see that he had spun around before shooting, and he emptied the gun into the opposite wall, ensuring that he wouldn’t harm Scully or himself. It’s so much more powerful that way.

Yellow and goldenrod versions end in the Quonochontaug house. Scully’s voice over was added afterwards.

I find it interesting that Scully’s cancer is never referenced or alluded to in the script or episode. Perhaps an indication that Goodwin had been working on the story for a while, before the mid-season addition of the cancer arc.

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Trevor, written by Ken Hawryliw and Jim Guttridge. Hawryliw was prop master on the show in seasons 1-5, and it looks like this is his only writing credit. Guttridge is a composer and orchestrator, but not on The X-Files. He was a friend of KH’s. Trevor is his only writing credit. I have the blue revision (2/5/99) and the salmon revision (2/18/99).

Hawryliw has said in a recent interview on Sammensværgelsen – en dansk X-Files Podcast that they made 12 or 13 story pitches before landing on the story for Trevor. He said it was difficult to come up with an idea that hadn’t been done before. After the story was approved, they had about a week and a half to deliver the script. I wonder how accurate that is, given the length of time between the revisions I have (which suggests to me there wasn’t as much of a time crunch). Since Hawryliw is describing things that happened 24-25 years earlier, I’m taking his stories with a grain of salt. 

He said that Chris Carter didn’t want a purely science fiction story, it needed a human motivation. He said the “beautiful idea” they came up with was that Rawls could have anything in the world (he could break into banks, steal anything) but the one thing he wanted was to hug his child, and he could never have that. It’s very interesting that his description of the ending was that Rawls sacrificed himself to save his son. That’s not at all what I take away from the episode. More on that later. 

Hawryliw couldn’t remember who did the rewrites, but he thought it was probably John Shiban, and Vince Gilligan did a polish as well. He said the condom joke seemed like a Vince thing. Hawryliw said Carter’s assistant told him he was rewritten less than Stephen King and William Gibson. 

Hawryliw wanted to write an old school episode, with a scary monster like in the early seasons. And he wanted to keep Mulder and Scully together throughout the investigation, which gave lots of opportunity for banter. I think he accomplished this. Although some find the investigation plodding, I think it was an interesting idea, and Pinker Rawls is a truly terrifying villain. 

In reading the blue revision, it seemed to me that a lot of the script notes sound like Vince Gilligan, at least in the first two acts. I mean, I never worked on the show and I’ve never met them, and maybe I can’t tell the difference between John Shiban and Vince Gilligan, but I’ve read a lot of X-Files scripts. If you gave me this to read and asked me to guess who wrote it, I’d say Vince Gilligan. For example:

  • We’re peering into a Southern road farm prison (refer to “Cool Hand Luke”)
  • Again, no blood or ooze
  • Redwop dust (anyone with history with the show would know this)
  • A couple of Skynyrd and ZZ tapes
  • June watches a lot of Martha Stewart 
  • Robert gooses the volume on the remote
  • Thrift-T-Mart Mall
  • The handcuffs shatter like peanut brittle
  • Rawls wriggles his fingers, voodoo-like
  • The steel breaks off in Saltine-like shards

The first notable difference I’m seeing between the blue revision and the episode is when Mulder and Scully talk to June, it’s in an interrogation room, instead of her house. So they’re at the police station when they discover Rawls had been in the trunk of their car. Then cut to two state troopers at June’s house, discovering the place has been torn up, and Rawls, who attacks and kills them. By the salmon revision, Mulder and Scully interview June in June’s house, eliminating the transfer to the police station. They discover that Rawls had been in the trunk of their car while still at June’s house. The two troopers take June into protective custody from there, instead of getting killed by Rawls. This is much tidier, saving time and lives!

When Mulder and Scully find June’s medical bills and realize she had a child just months after Rawls went to prison, Scully says “‘I want what’s mine.’ This man is looking for his child, Mulder.” The script continues, “Mulder knows it. Off them, seeing Rawls in a different light…” This suggests we’re supposed to see something noble in Rawls because of this. He’s not just after the money he stole, he wants his son. But I never read Rawls that way. He’s a monster. He sees his son as something to possess. He isn’t motivated by love but by a sense of entitlement. He won’t let anyone else have what belongs to him. That’s why he’s so terrifying. That’s why June did everything she could to keep Trevor from Rawls. It’s not this new power that makes him a monster. He already was one.

To me, this is what makes Trevor such a good episode. It’s so interesting to me that that’s not what the writer intended, and still seems to think. He sees Trevor as Rawls’s soft spot, his redemption. But I don’t think it’s there. More on this later.

Here’s a fun find. In the blue revision, Mulder asks for rubber 9mm bullets “or something to that effect (as per Tommy Day’s research)”

By the later revision, Tommy’s research had determined it should be rubber 12 gauge shotgun slugs.

Here’s a significant change. In the blue revision, Rawls bangs on the phone booth door and is about to reach in to grab Trevor when Mulder shows up and shoots him with the rubber bullets. He staggers away, and that’s when June hits him with the car.

In the later revision, Rawls sees that he has broken a hole in the glass and could reach in to grab Trevor, when he sees how scared the boy is. “It’s not like he’s suddenly a good guy, or that he’s had a big change of heart–he just doesn’t know what the hell to do….He backs off, turns away.” And that’s when he gets hit by the car.

Then we get one final page, the only new page in the salmon revision:

This is how the episode plays out. Mulder suggests that Rawls wanted another chance. But it’s not definitive. 

I suppose I can see how Hawryliw could describe this as Rawls sacrificing himself for his son. Maybe. It’s more just a choice to de-escalate in the moment and think about what he’s doing, and then June showed up. He didn’t ever intentionally give anything of himself. Perhaps I’m reading too much into a comment in an interview 25 years after the episode was written. I remain firmly on June’s side, however. Rawls would have hurt the boy and had to be stopped.

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En Ami, written by William B. Davis, who played the Cigarette Smoking Man from the Pilot through My Struggle IV. I have the gold revision (2/11/00). Production draft was 1/24/00. Here’s another script by someone familiar with the show, or at least with the mythology episodes. 

With most of the Syndicate’s key figures killed off in season 6, Davis was needed for fewer episodes in season 7, so he came up with a story for himself. He hadn’t had many scenes with Gillian, so he included her in the story, postulating that CSM could make himself irresistible to Scully and seduce her to his agenda. (Shapiro, Official Guide to The X-Files, vol 6).

Davis presented his idea to Chris Carter, who was intrigued. Carter then had Davis work with Frank Spotnitz to write the first draft of the script. After that, Davis did some intensive rewriting with Spotnitz and John Shiban. 

According to Shiban, Davis saw himself as the romantic hero of The X-Files and En Ami as a love story. (Shapiro). I’ve heard Davis say this before and I can never tell if he’s joking, or just horribly mistaken.

Spotnitz said the challenge would be finding a way for the audience to believe Scully would trust this man she’s spent 7 years hating. (Shapiro). I think they came up with a plausible scenario, if not a completely believable one. 

With all the help Davis had drafting and revising the script, it’s hard to draw any conclusions about his writing. There are some story beats in the script that are so incongruous that I think they must have been Davis’s ideas.

Act One, in the office, Mulder and Scully are talking about the healing in Goochland, VA. The script includes this description: “MULDER (earnestly, a la Roma Downey, with accent) All you have to do is open your heart. God is always there waiting to answer your prayers.” This line was cut, and Mulder just nods at Scully instead. I kind of wish we got to hear David do the accent. We still get a Touched by an Angel reference, though. As he leaves the office to investigate, Mulder says “I just gotta know if it was Roma Downey or Della Reese.”

CSM to Scully: “I’m not here to dash their illusions. Only to remove yours.” That’s a really good line. Very in character. I bet Spotnitz wrote it. 

CSM tells Scully he’s tired of Mulder’s foolish ideas of overthrowing the system. Then the next scene in the script, which was ultimately cut, has Mulder in Skinner’s office demanding a subpoena to confiscate every computer at DARPA to find out who sent him an email. Looking very foolish indeed.

The scene continues with Scully telling Skinner she found no evidence of any government agency involved in healing the boy. She’s obeying CSM’s order to keep information from Mulder. He senses her prevarication, and she looks “deeply uncomfortable with the lie she’s just told.” Mulder confronts Scully after they leave Skinner’s office. When she again says she found nothing, Mulder insinuates that she’s lying and storms off. At that, Scully pulls out the business card left by CSM, making her decision. 

This whole scene was cut for good reason. Mulder can’t already be suspicious of Scully when she leaves him a message saying she’ll be out of town attending to a family emergency. And without the scene, Scully doesn’t have to lie to Skinner.

As Scully is driving with CSM, the script has the radio playing “Brahms Cello Sonata No. 1 in F minor (or some other equally beautiful piece), which gives the scene a strange mood. Driving with this man we’ve known and feared for years, to the haunting melodies of Brahms. Scully stares straight ahead, the melody not lost on her.” The production team decided to go with Mark Snow’s score instead. 

I feel like telling Davis “stop trying to make fetch happen!” Scully is never going to be persuaded CSM is some misunderstood soul, and neither is the audience.  I’ve seen other writers who just didn’t quite get the characters right. I think this is the first time I’ve seen a writer  deliberately trying to change who the characters are.

Here’s a silly bit: “The Lone Gunmen. But something’s wrong. They look different. Frohike … dressed like Byers. Langly and Byers are in disguise too. Byers dressed like Langly, … Langly dressed like Frohike.” This made it to the episode, but I didn’t realize they were supposed to be disguised as each other until I read it in the script. 

In the script, when Scully confronts CSM asking how she got out of her clothes, CSM responds, “I undressed you in the dark if it makes any difference.”

I guess that was too ick, because it was deleted. In the episode CSM doesn’t answer the question about how she got out of her clothes. He just says he carried her because she was delirious. In the flashback in My Struggle III this was sanitized further, with a CSM voice over added, saying “we carried you, my housekeeper and I…you can ask her.”

Davis said he was basically happy with how the episode came out. He originally pictured CSM as a much better actor at winning Scully’s affection, and Scully was somewhat less resistant, but the episode was restructured. (Shapiro). 

When I read this comment I immediately thought of one specific moment in the episode, and an unusual circumstance with the script. 

At the end of Act Three, Scully and CSM are in the restaurant. CSM tells her she looks stunning in the dress he picked out for her. Scully tells him she’s still not clear what her role is. It’s at this point in my script that a page is missing. It goes from page 44A to page 46, which is the start of Act Four. I’ve checked with other script collectors I know, and none of them has this missing page or a different version of the script.

In the episode, CSM tells Scully that what they’re being given is the cure for all human disease. Then he says, “I’m a lonely man, Dana.” He steps outside, while Scully looks pensive.

Is he making an “indecent proposal”? And are we to think Scully is considering it? Does the missing page take it further?

In the episode, CSM steps outside to meet with black haired man. While he’s gone, Scully is delivered a note with the meeting location for the next morning.

Did the missing page have something different? And why is it missing? Was it so horrible that it was intentionally destroyed by the powers that be? Is my conspiracy-addled mind just grasping to find meaning in what was probably a photocopy error? We may never know!

Finally, there’s this deleted scene, after Scully leaves the cabin: “The CSM is sitting on the bed where Scully slept, holding the beautiful dress he got for her. Bringing it to his face…he inhales the trace essence of what he’ll never possess. Is it possible to be moved by his sadness?”

I found this tweet from when I first read the script three years ago: 

My feelings haven’t changed.

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Rm9sbG93ZXJz, written by Kristin Cloke & Shannon Hamblin. I have the green revision (11/5/17). Original draft was 10/17/17.

Kristen Cloke is a long time member of the X-Files/1013 family. She played Melissa Rydel in The Field Where I Died, had a recurring role in Millennium, and is married to Glen Morgan, who directed this episode. Cloke told The X-Cast that she had been writing with Morgan for years, but this was her first chance to write something for him to direct.

Hamblin worked as Glen Morgan’s writing assistant on Lore and then season 10 of The X-Files, and Morgan asked if she’d be willing to write an episode with Kristen Cloke for season 11. Hamblin told The X-Cast that Morgan had a basic idea that they started with and some elements he wanted to include, and Cloke & Hamblin came up with a story to go around it. One thing Morgan insisted on was that there be no dialogue in the beginning. As Cloke explained, they wanted to emphasize what it was like to be so engrossed with technology that it’s like there’s no one else in the room.

Hamblin was a longtime fan of the show, but she didn’t go back and watch previous episodes to prepare, because she knew this episode was going to be different from anything else. 

Hamblin and Cloke created story notecards for the episode together and then divided up the scenes and wrote them independently. They each worked Scully’s personal massager into a scene without having discussed it! Cloke’s was the one they ended up using because it fit the story better.

The sushi scene plays out a little differently in the episode than in the script. The script doesn’t include any laughter or playfulness. Mulder is in full-on grumpy old man mode. I imagine Glen Morgan and the actors had input on this, making it feel more like the Mulder and Scully we would expect on a date, while still making the point that they’re more focused on their electronics than each other.

Script note gold: “Scully offers him her credit card. Mulder, however, removes his card from his wallet and holds it up, as if to insist on paying. Ever the smart and practical feminist, Scully shrugs and lets him pay.”

In the script, when Scully’s driverless car arrives, “[Mulder] reacts as if ‘You sure?’ She sighs, gives him a hug, and opens the door.”

We were robbed! I’ve long felt that this would have been the perfect place in Season 11 for a kiss. A quick peck goodbye, something you’d expect from a longtime couple. But we didn’t get that, or any other kiss the entire season. I know there were lots of hugs and some other implied activities in the season, but still… There’s BTS footage where Mulder kisses Scully on the top of her head before she gets in the car. That would have been cute! Hmmph.

“Waiting at his phone and hungry from no dinner, he reaches into a box of Pop-Tarts, removes the mylar paper, and eats.” 

I’ve noticed over the years that it’s practically a fanfic trope that Mulder loves Pop-Tarts, which is funny because we’ve never seen him eat any until this moment. When I met Kristen Cloke at Philefest, I asked her if she was aware of the fanfic Pop-Tarts trope, and she said yes, that’s exactly why they included it in the episode. She said because there was so little dialogue, they wanted to fill the screen with little touches that would remind the viewers that they were watching Mulder and Scully, as well as honor the very active fandom. You can see this with the way Mulder practices his baseball grip, just like we saw in Home, and with Scully’s use of “Queequeg” as her password. Even the whole premise of the episode plays with the idea that Mulder is a notoriously bad tipper, as seen in Bad Blood and The Unnatural. But the Pop-Tarts reference is my favorite.

The final line of the script: “Their phones ring and beep…but they ignore them and continue looking into each other’s eyes. Much more exciting than an illuminated screen.” So lovely!

I read a review that described the episode as feeling like “a wholly new thing that also understands what makes Mulder and Scully, and The X-Files itself, tick.” Alan Sepinwall, UPROXX. I agree completely. 

Up next, I wrap up the series with an in-depth look at all things…

The One-Timers part 2

The Staff Writers

In this installment I look at episodes written by members of the show’s writing staff, who, for various reasons, had only one episode produced. These episodes are Oubliette, Schizogeny, Orison, Kitten, Familiar, and Nothing Lasts Forever. They run the gamut from underrated, to not quite there, to if only we had another season.

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Oubliette, written by Charles Grant Craig. I read two versions, blue (9/27/95) and goldenrod (10/5/95). The original draft was 9/25/95, just two days before the earlier version I read. Craig was a producer/writer in the 3rd season, although he left the show shortly before Oubliette was produced. This is his only episode. Craig wrote Mulder very well, character-wise, allowing him to show empathy for both Amy and Lucy. The biggest criticism I hear about the episode, however, is that Scully seems very out of character, taking the side of local law enforcement against Mulder.

There are some dialogue changes in the later version which I’m guessing are from Chris Carter. They add depth, which I associate with him. And Mulder’s line, “not everything I do or say or think or feel goes back to my sister” is not in either version. I have read that David contributed that line, and it appears that’s true. 

The episode was also restructured so that Mulder was on his own in the early scenes, with Scully arriving later. I wondered whether Gillian had a schedule conflict. I found that she did an episode of Eek the Cat around that time. It’s possible/likely she needed time off to do that.

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Schizogeny, written by Jessica Scott and Mike Wolleager. I listened to an interview with Mike Wolleager on Sammensvaergalsen en dansk X-Files Podcast. Both he and Scott had worked on the show in season 4, he was Howard Gordon’s assistant and she was Chris Carter’s researcher, and they were promoted to writers for season 5. They pitched the idea and revised the pitch several times, then it was approved. It was supposed to be episode 10 but last minute was pushed to episode 9, so the first draft was written in only 3 days. They did a couple rewrites as it was in production, then Chris Carter took over. These circumstances explain the major differences between the versions of the script, and the mid-production note that the script was being rewritten.

I read 4 different versions of this script, each significantly different: blue revision (11/21/97), pink (11/24/97), green (11/26/97), and yellow (the copy I have is undated). The first thing I noted was that, while the tree climbing scene was in all of them, Mulder’s “boyish agility” line wasn’t in any of them. I can picture David thinking he has to say something as he’s climbing the tree, just to keep it interesting, and ad libbing that.

The script was heavily rewritten. The last act especially. In the green version there’s a note in the 4th Act: THE REST OF THE SCRIPT IS BEING REWRITTEN

This was obviously during production. Not something that usually happens, but not unheard of in a network TV schedule.

Wollaeger said their goal was a really scary episode, but he doesn’t think they achieved it. They needed a paranormal element, so they just declared that Karin controlled the trees, but they never explained how, so he was unsatisfied with that.

When I watched the episode, I noted that there were three scenes added after the latest version of the script that I read, all exposition intended to explain what’s happening and why. And Mulder’s voice over at the end was completely rewritten. It seems clear that these were Chris Carter’s contributions. 

The change in the voice over was really interesting. As it aired, Mulder talks about forensic analysis of the soil, and Karin’s medical records. It’s impersonal, and it sounds like something Mulder would put in a case report. 

Before the rewrite, the voice over actually fits what we saw, everyone looking away as the man who just killed a woman with an axe walks off. But it’s kind of shocking to hear Mulder admit that’s what he’s doing.

I’ve always been fascinated by this episode, because Mulder is so quintessentially Mulder in it. It seemed like the writers knew him really well. They just didn’t know a lot about writing an episode of TV. That’s another thing I learned in the interview, it was their first script to be produced.

Finally, since we know that Chris Carter did a lot of rewrites, I can surmise that either Chris or David came up with the boyish agility line. My money is still on David. 

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Orison, by Chip Johannassen. I have the original draft (10/6/99) and the yellow revision (10/15/99), as well as the shooting schedule (10/18/99). Johannassen was a staff writer on Chris Carter’s sister show, Millennium, rather than The X-Files, but I think his episode belongs in this category. Carter had pulled the plug on Millennium after three seasons, ironically just short of the millennium, but wanted to wind up the story. I’ve read critique that Johannassen should have been asked to write the Millennium episode of The X-Files, to bring that story to a close. But that’s not what happened. Instead, Frank Black (the main character of Millennium) was plugged into a very X-Files-y story written by Vince Gilligan (who never wrote for Millennium) and Frank Spotnitz, and Johannassen was tasked with creating a monster of the week episode.

The first draft differs in a lot of ways from the episode as produced. Most significantly, there’s no Donnie Pfaster. The main villain is an escaped prisoner who found he could stop time after attending a Bible study with Reverend Orison. Carter and Spotnitz liked the premise, but they wanted to revisit an earlier monster for Season 7, so they worked Pfaster into the story.

Act One begins with Scully on the phone trying to get her money back for a piece of exercise equipment she bought. It’s a funny bit, but it seems so unlike Scully. A good example of an experienced screen writer, inexperienced in writing for The X-Files.

Anyway, Scully is put on hold, and the hold music is Don’t Look Any Further, setting up this plot element.

OMG can you imagine Mulder saying “panties”?!!! 

When Scully talks to Orison in the hospital, he refers to a scene at the start of Act One, when Jehovah’s Witnesses came to her door, repeating what they said as he moves his finger in a “slow hypnotic beat” and Scully “finds it difficult to move”. Then she hears the song coming through a speaker. She silent screams, frozen in terror, as Orison escapes. She then goes into convulsions and has to be medicated and hospitalized. 

This was obviously reworked significantly, with the US Marshal being hypnotized and allowing the escape, rather than Scully. Again, I’m reminded that this writer doesn’t know the characters very well.

Scully suggests Orison was sent to her, that he was doing God’s work. Mulder ridicules her, saying it’s just a coincidence that she heard the song a few times. This carries through to the episode, although Scully’s response is more forceful here: “No one knows how God works, Mulder. Certainly not you.”

Scully’s connection to the song is quite different. It’s told with a flashback to her high school choir, with Scully’s voice over describing the effect the song had on her.

She says something happened when she heard the song, as we see teenage Scully sobbing. “Something overwhelmed me…I alone was hearing the music.” She falls to the floor, convulsing. Mulder notes, “The same reaction you had in the hospital.” Scully tells him, “God tried to contact me that day, and it scared me.” After that, science became her passion, because it would make everything understandable. But over the years, she’s longed for what she passed up that day. “I’m painfully aware that a miracle was offered me and I foolishly rejected it, and I believe that after all these years Orison has been sent to offer me a second chance.” Mulder is skeptical, tries to convince her not to fall for Orison’s tricks.

This is a bit much. It’s treating Scully as if she’s a one-off character, using a back story to explain the case, rather than thoughtfully reflecting on Scully’s character as it’s developed over the past 6 seasons. I can see why Carter et al made some changes.

During this conversation Mulder gets a call saying the escaped prisoner has been located. For some reason Mulder goes off to help capture him without Scully, his partner.

While Mulder is at the scene looking for the prisoner, Scully puts together some clues from the pamphlet left by the Jehovah’s Witnesses. She heads out, just missing Mulder’s phone message that he had found evidence that Orison killed all the escaped prisoners. Orison’s not a prophet, he’s a murderer.

In Act Four, Scully drives to the location she figured out, and is attacked, while Mulder returns to her apartment. He figures out where she’s gone, after receiving a call from her phone.

Back with Scully, she’s bound, as is Orison, while held at gunpoint by the prisoner. Orison is preaching, the prisoner gets mad and tears Scully’s blouse open (why?!!), finding that her cellphone is on, connected with Mulder’s. He realizes Mulder is tracing the call and smashes the phone.

Mulder arrives just as the prisoner is about to drive off with Scully. Car chase, foot chase. Scully breaks free. Prisoner aims at her, fires, as Mulder shouts “Sculllaaaay” (ok, the script just says “Scully” but I know how David would shout it). The prisoner stops time like he did in the teaser, except Mulder can still move. He rushes to Scully, pushes her out of the bullet’s path (very similar to what happens in Rush). Cops rush in and catch the bad guy. 

Back to Scully’s apartment, where she’s listening to Don’t Look Any Further. Mulder enters. Scully actually, I kid you not, says “Don’t worry Mulder, I know it’s just a song. I’m sorry I was so wrong about everything.”

Then there’s this:

Which is pretty romantic, and ties back to their earlier discussions about faith. But it isn’t very consistent with Mulder’s character. 

So I can see why Carter and Spotnitz liked the basic premise of the story, and I can absolutely see why they thought it needed some rewriting in order to be an X-Files episode.

I realize that it’s possible I’m finding Mulder and Scully to be out of character in some of these early drafts by one-timers just because I’m so used to watching the episodes as they aired. But I really think it’s true that some of these writers didn’t know the characters or the show well enough. So far, the Orison draft strikes me this way the most.

And in fact, every bit of dialogue between Mulder and Scully was rewritten. Even when the conversations are conveying the same information, the words are different. In the later version Scully’s lines have the complexity and thoughtfulness we expect from her. And Mulder has a balance of skepticism for the religious aspects and compassion for Scully’s experiences throughout, rather than the wild swings from one extreme to the other.

By the yellow revision, not only had Donnie Pfaster been added, but the writers portrayed him as a literal demon, pure evil. This was a change from Irresistible, where his nature was more ambiguous, the image of demons metaphorical even. I read that Rob Bowman was upset about Scully shooting Pfaster at the end, essentially in cold blood. Making Pfaster a demon allowed the show, and Mulder, to suggest that it was a righteous killing.

The description of Scully’s struggle is very powerful: “Great intention warring with great restraint. Morality and religion and all that is right and wrong warring with some kind of deep, primitive, natural sense of law.” Scully is waiting for a sign and Pfaster starts to smile. “And then everything goes black…. shattered by a loud gunshot.”

The final conversation between Mulder and Scully had not yet been written in the yellow revision. It’s described as “Sitting on her bed, talking about evil, the devil. And don’t look any further.”

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Kitten, written by Gabe Rotter. I have the green revision (11/2/17). The original production draft was 10/2/17.

The revival episodes provide a nice contrast to Season 1. Even one-timers had the opportunity to be closely versed in the show and the characters, given its legacy. 24 years had passed by this point, and The X-Files remained a cultural touchstone, worthy of two revival event series (or at least a second chance at a good one). 

Gabe Rotter, it turns out, had lots of experience with the show. He started as a PA right out of college at the end of Season 7. Rotter admitted in an interview with The X-Files Fan Retrospective that he wasn’t very familiar with the show when he started the job, but he started borrowing VHS episodes, watching every episode in a very short time, and he fell in love with the storytelling and the characters. Rotter said that Frank Spotnitz invited him to sit in on writers meetings, which was an incredible learning experience. He was then promoted to writer’s assistant in Season 9 and even had a character named after him in the episode Scary Monsters. Kitten wasn’t the first script Rotter wrote for The X-Files. He also wrote an untitled episode for Season 10, but it was never produced. 

Kitten came about after Mitch Pileggi jokingly complained that Skinner didn’t have enough to do in Season 10. Rotter kept thinking about that conversation and took it as a challenge to come up with an episode which featured this beloved character. He looked back through early episodes that touched on Skinner’s backstory and found some bits that seemed worth exploring. He pitched the idea to Chris Carter, Glen Morgan, and Darin Morgan, who were excited about it as well, and it went from there.

Two themes he wanted to explore were why hadn’t Skinner risen higher in the ranks of the FBI and the fact that after all these years “we still know precious little about Walter Sergei Skinner”. Rotter wanted to convey the understanding that Skinner would do it all over again because he believed in Mulder and Scully and their cause.

Rotter talked about his writing style in an interview with X-Files News. He learned to blend comedy and drama from the likes of Vince Gilligan, John Shiban, and Frank Spotnitz. He said he loves writing Mulder, because he’s a wise-ass. Although Rotter typically leans more toward humor, this episode had to be a lot darker than originally planned, to convey the worry Mulder and Scully had for Skinner. I have read Rotter’s unproduced script, and it had a lot of humor. 

From the teaser this script attempts to show us what kind of person Skinner is–the way he tries to comfort John James when they’re ambushed, the way he risks himself (and possibly the mission) to rescue the man who’s been shot, the guilt over what happened to John, even though he couldn’t have prevented it. It’s more overt than we’ve seen in the past. I can tell Rotter’s aim is to shed some light, while staying true to what’s been hinted at before. Only someone intimately familiar with the show could do that successfully. 

Act One opens with the scene in Kersh’s office. He’s trying to get information from Mulder and Scully, but they answer every one of his questions with a question. This is nicely done, bringing to mind Mulder’s meeting with Blevins in Redux II. Very in character. Then Kersh throws it back at them, saying “let me be unambiguous…”. Very Kersh, like when he dresses Scully down at the end of Drive, or his frustration at the end of One Son when he actually says to Mulder “what the hell is that supposed to mean?” I’ve heard criticism that Kersh’s antagonism toward Mulder and Scully here seems to ignore the fact that the last time we saw Kersh (in The Truth), he was helping Mulder escape after being sentenced to death. But I think it makes sense he would help then, when what was happening was clearly wrong, and still be the same Deputy Director Kersh who finds Mulder to be a thorn in his side in the current situation.

This is where Kersh tells Mulder and Scully that Skinner’s career stalled because of his blind loyalty to them, setting up this theme for the episode. 

We get some funny wisecracks from Mulder while they search Skinner’s apartment. One too many apparently, because there was a Van Gogh joke after they found the ear that was deleted (good call IMO). 

A script note: “Another gorgeous 2018 Ford creeps to camera and stops.” I’ve noticed a few notes like this in Season 11 scripts, little jokes about the obvious product placement they’re incorporating.

The Vietnam flashback scene shows us visually what Skinner told Mulder about in One Breath. Probably the biggest criticism I’ve heard of this episode is that there was no need to show this, Skinner’s story in Season 2 was enough, this retread didn’t add anything we didn’t already know. But it does add John James/Kitten. That aspect of the story is built up in this episode to tell us more about Skinner than we knew before. I personally don’t feel that using the story here takes away from the impact of it in One Breath. 

When Davey tells Skinner his father called him “babykiller” we see “the remark bites Skinner deep. It shakes his cool.” We know that this incident has stayed with Skinner. It’s shaped the choices he’s made in his life. But hearing it used to define him hits hard. This feels real to me. It’s a good bit of characterization, consistent with what we know from the past and building on it.

Then we learn that Skinner testified against John at his court martial, but he withheld testimony about the gas John was exposed to, because those were his orders. He has felt responsible for John’s fate ever since. It “has tormented him for a long, long time.” That’s also believable. 

After seeing Skinner in the deer cam video, Mulder and Scully talk about Skinner, what they know about him, what they see as different about his behavior lately. It serves the story, the season even. But it doesn’t necessarily feel like a conversation they would have. Not that it’s out of character exactly, there’s just nothing about it that makes me think it’s them. 

This line from Mulder was cut: “I think we need to consider the real possibility that he’s become resentful of the effect we’ve had on his career. Based on his conduct here in Mud Lick I’d take it a step further and say we need to consider that he’s lost it. That he’s no longer the man we thought he was.” I’m glad this was deleted. It services the plot at the expense of character. I don’t think Mulder would believe or say this.

Here’s a script note from the final scene with Mulder, Scully, and Skinner that I love: Mulder suggests that Skinner call Kersh as soon as they get somewhere with phone signal. Skinner, “sensing there’s more to the suggestion than he’s saying, [asks], ‘Something you want to share?’ Mulder and Scully look sheepish. Like kids being confronted by their dad about an awkward subject.” This is clearly written by someone who understands the dynamic.

And then this one: “He has more to say, but it’s personal and difficult for the typically guarded Skinner.” Love love love this.

And then we get the beautiful speech from Skinner, which is just so perfectly Skinner. And Mulder telling him “We’re with you” is the perfect response.

My feeling about Kitten is that it’s a perfectly serviceable episode of The X-Files, written by someone who knows the characters and understands the show. It’s not a stand out, but it’s good. I think that if there was another season of The X-Files, Rotter wouldn’t be a one-timer. 

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Familiar, written by Benjamin Van Allen, directed by Holly Dale, also a one-timer director. I have the yellow revision (11/30/17). Production draft was 11/17/17. 

Van Allen said in an interview with The X-Cast that he was too young to watch the first seasons of The X-Files when they aired, but he started watching around season 7. He clearly recalled seeing Hungry. After film school, he worked as a PA on The After, a pilot Chris Carter produced for Amazon. He continued to work as Carter’s assistant prior to the X-Files revival, and he was brought on as a writer’s assistant for Season 10. He said that Carter was really good at involving people in the story process, and let him pitch ideas.

Van Allen was promoted to staff writer on Season 11. He was told he’d be writing an episode and to come up with ideas to pitch. Chris was familiar with his abilities and knew he could handle it. The same was true for Gabe Rotter, while Wollaeger, who was also a staff writer, said he had to come up with an idea (Schizogeny) before he was assigned an episode. Carter gave each of them the opportunity to write their first episode of television, though. Van Allen said, “I was completely ecstatic, especially since the first episode I’ve written for television is an X-File. It still blows my mind. It can’t be real, right?”

Van Allen wanted to do something old school, for the fans, as much like a traditional X-Files monster of the week as possible. Familiar is a throw back to earlier episodes, by design.

The teaser was the first idea he had, the one thing that didn’t change during the process. He said after coming up with that, he thought of every cool thing he wanted to happen and put them in an outline. Then he worked on connecting the dots. Once the outline was finished, he looked for ways to develop the themes. 

Van Allen showed his outlines to Gabe Rotter first, then revised them based on Rotter’s input. Once he had the episode boarded, he presented it to the other writers, who suggested changes. Then he wrote the whole script on his own. Chris read it, gave him notes for a couple of rewrites, then it was approved. 

Familiar was written and filmed to be the 9th episode of the season, mostly to accommodate James Wong’s schedule for directing Nothing Lasts Forever, which was going to be episode 8. But once both episodes were finished, the production staff realized that the personal scenes between Mulder and Scully in Nothing Lasts Forever were better suited to the penultimate episode, and Familiar was moved to the 8th slot.

Van Allen said it was easier to write Mulder, who believes in hell hounds and witches and “the fun stuff.” Scully was harder to write because she is the science of the episode, but her profiling and her desire to find the killer grounds the episode. I don’t actually know whether it made sense for Scully to do the profiling. That seems separate from the science and medicine which is her expertise, whereas Mulder is the profiler. But it worked for Scully to be following up on this profile while Mulder investigated his theories, so it’s not a huge problem.

Van Allen said David and Gillian brought a lot to the characters that wasn’t in the script. David ad libbed the line where Mulder calls Scully his homie. Van Allen said it was exciting to be on set, listening through headphones, hearing something unexpected and just knowing it was gold. 

Van Allen said one of his biggest goals with this episode was to create a monster that could live on as an iconic X-Files monster that people recognize right away, and he felt he accomplished that with Mr. Chuckleteeth. I have to agree! Here’s how Mr. Chuckleteeth is described in script: “A MAN wearing a DINNER SUIT and a WHITE FACE MASK with a LARGE TOOTHY GRIN. Is he comical or creepy?” Van Allen said the character turned out just as he envisioned. 

This is the last line from the teaser: “Andrew’s fingers sticking up through the leaves as we pan off to find the dismembered head of the Mr. Chuckleteeth doll. Grinning at us.” Yep, that’s the way you do it!

There’s a character named Emily in this episode. I saw some complaints about that on Twitter when the episode aired, arguing that that name was already taken by a significant character and was no longer available for use in The X-Files. Actually, Andrew’s mother was named Diana in the script but changed to Diane for the episode. I wonder if this is the reason for the change.

From the start Scully is the voice of reason. When local law enforcement suggest Andrew was killed by coyotes, she points out that coyotes rarely attack humans. LLE says there’s talk of a new predator called a coywolf. Mulder, of course, knows what this is, but “Scully is dubious.” When Mulder asserts FBI jurisdiction over the killing of the immediate family of a law officer, “Scully glances at Mulder knowingly–she knows that’s not why he’s here.” But when Scully points out evidence to LLE that this could be murder, Mulder backs her up.

Van Allen definitely did what he set out to do. He captured the feel of a traditional Monster of the Week episode, with the perfect dynamic between Mulder and Scully. 

But then, there’s this: In the episode, when Mulder leaves the morgue to talk to Emily, because she was an eyewitness who hadn’t been interviewed, Scully says he’s wasting his time. The script describes this, “But it’s said to Mulder’s back as he exits and is gone.” The script then goes on, “Scully (to herself): And now you’re wasting mine.” This last line was cut. I’m glad. It seems a bit harsh, and a bit out of character.

In the next scene, Mulder tries to question Emily, but she remains focused on the TV, and the script notes, “Maybe Mulder is wasting his time.” It’s a nice balance to the earlier scene with Scully. 

Van Allen mentioned that William was a theme throughout the season, and he worked a mention into this episode. Anna asks Mulder if he has kids, and Mulder says his son is grown. Then this note: “It’s an evasion of course. But it still strikes a chord.” I like Mulder’s response a lot. It tells us that Mulder considers himself a father, even under the circumstances as we know them. 

Ultimately, Mulder’s instincts about talking to Emily prove correct. In the script, Emily points to the TV when Mr. Chuckleteeth comes on screen, and Mulder’s curiosity is piqued. End scene. In the episode, when Emily points at the TV, she says, “He was in the forest”, a much needed clarification. It even sounds like the line was looped in later, so possibly the need for this line wasn’t recognized until the editing process. 

The memorial service for Andrew isn’t yet written in the script I have. It’s an important scene, where we see the dynamics of the townspeople, and where Eggers learns Scully’s theory that a sexual predator killed his son.

In the script, after Scully meets with Chief Strong, they see Eggers speed past in his patrol car. They follow him to the house of a known sex offender. Scully and Chief Strong confront Eggers, who says he found the “piece of garbage” Scully was talking about. In the episode, a scene was added, prior to Scully’s conversation with Chief Strong, showing Eggers searching the sex offender database and finding the suspect’s name and address before he goes tearing off. This bit of context made the episode stronger.

Van Allen said that one of the themes he wanted to explore was mob justice v. the presumption of innocence, using witch hunts to tie it to the setting and story.

Mulder tells Scully he doesn’t think the sex offender they’re investigating is the guy who killed Andrew, but he admits he’s not sure of anything. We ultimately learn that he’s not the killer, but he’s convicted by the mob and executed by Eggers anyway. 

I remember reading criticism of Mulder in this scene for taking the side of the sex offender and refusing to believe the guy was guilty, and by extension criticism of the episode for making Mulder right. As a career defense attorney, I take great issue with the notion that the guy should be presumed guilty based on his past. On the other hand, the guy failed to register, which is a condition society requires for protection, he’s working as a birthday party clown, which is a serious violation, and there’s enough in his house to warrant an investigation. 

Does it undermine the seriousness of sex offenses to write a scene where a past offender turns out to be innocent of the present crime (which as far as I can tell does not involve a sex offense)? Is Mulder wrong to question guilt in this particular case? It’s an interesting question and a complex issue. In any event, I have no criticism of Van Allen’s writing.

Mulder is bothered by the rush to judgment and mass hysteria, the mob convicting the man for the sins of his past. Mulder makes a good point, in my opinion. The scene is a bit longer in the script, with Mulder saying that focusing on a scapegoat allows people to ignore their own sins (this was worked into the courtroom scene later). He’s still concerned that the guilty party is someone closely connected to the victim, a possibility that is currently being ignored.

Then, when Scully asks, “So who do you like as the killer?” Mulder answers, “I like Mr. Chuckleteeth.” Ha! Way to make his rational speech sound crazy! This line was obviously deleted.

In the woods, after Emily’s body is found, Mulder confronts Strong about closing Andrew’s case and hiding evidence of witchcraft, like the salt on Andrew’s body. I love this note: “As Mulder stands over Chief Strong,… Strong remains weak.”

And this: “SCULLY (dependably dubious)…” at Mulder’s claim that he saw a hell hound.

Missing from the script is the super creepy “Mr. Chuckleteeth will send you straight to hell” scene!  The version I have is only 50 pages, which is shorter than the usual script, so it was still a work in progress. 

I’m not sure why, but I didn’t fully appreciate this episode at first. During my most recent rewatch, though, I finally grasped why so many people love it. Van Allen wanted to write an episode in the most traditional X-Files way possible, and he accomplished that. It’s creepy and scary, the characters and mystery are compelling, and Mulder and Scully have some great interactions. 

Like Gabe Rotter, Ben Van Allen could have become one of the regular writers if The X-Files continued beyond season 11.

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Nothing Lasts Forever, written by Karen Nielsen. I have the goldenrod revision (11/19/17). Production draft was 11/2/17. Nielsen worked as script coordinator on Seasons 10 and 11 of The X-Files, working closely with the writers. In an interview with The X-Cast, Nielsen said Glen Morgan was familiar with her work making short films, which he shared with Chris Carter. Carter was impressed, and he asked Nielsen to write a script for Season 11.

Nielsen felt a lot of pressure writing for The X-Files. It was her first hour of network television, on one of the biggest shows of all time, and she was one of a few female writers. And she didn’t even know as she was writing it that it would be the last stand-alone episode of the show! But everyone on staff was so supportive, and Carter was “so chill.” 

She collaborated closely with Glen Morgan, and with James Wong, who directed the episode. Nielsen told The X-Cast that having guidance from two people who were there since day 1 was integral to making sure she captured the voice of the characters.

For this episode, Nielsen wanted to go as far as she could with the horror/gore elements, to “embrace the weird.” She commented that for Morgan and Wong, “it’s never too much” because they always push the envelope on gross. She said people can’t handle gore when it’s just gratuitous, but when it’s in character and story-driven, it’s accepted. So, with that in mind, she didn’t hold back.

Nielsen said there were a few calls from Standards & Practices as they saw the dailies, but not too many. They pretty much know what to expect from The X-Files. The pancreas lick caused a lot of concern, though. 

Here’s how it’s described in the script: “Dr. Dave pulls the pancreas out of the victim’s body with his left hand and lifts it towards his face as if for a closer look… He tugs his surgical mask down exposing his mouth then lifts the pancreas to his mouth. Dr. Dave extends his tongue and licks the entire organ. Then, like a sommelier, considers the taste…” 

That causes me concern too! But it certainly helped set the tone for the episode. To be sure, Nothing Lasts Forever is perhaps the goriest episode of the revival (possibly surpassed by My Struggle IV’s “sploded heads”). But, even though I’m pretty squeamish about the gross stuff, it’s all integral to the story, as Nielsen intended, and I find the episode so entertaining that I don’t mind it.

Another of Nielsen’s goals in writing the episode was to have character driven moments, which she felt would organically lead to exploring where Mulder and Scully were emotionally in the season. They were going through so much, and Nielsen knew it was time for their relationship to move forward and for them to talk about it. She was clear about wanting to include those scenes, and she was supported by the rest of the writers. 

Act One starts with Scully in the cathedral, receiving communion. Then she looks at stained glass depicting “a narrative from the bible. Mary witnesses her son’s ascension to a life eternal. CAMERA PUSHES IN on Scully as she looks with a sense of foreboding.”

This didn’t make it to the episode. Scully doesn’t appear to be looking at the stained glass, and we never get a clear view of any of it in the scene. But I find this description very intriguing. Is her sense of foreboding related to Jackson/William? What does she know or sense or suspect is in store for him? Also, it’s very cool how this ties in with the case Scully is about to investigate, just as the words spoken by the priest during communion do.

The two young FBI agents at the scene of the first murder are Colquitt and Bludworth, names we remember from CSM’s novel in Musings of a Cigarette Smoking Man. We can tell who was collaborating with Nielsen!

Nielsen described the fun David and Gillian had on set, which led to them contributing lines for their characters. For instance, Scully shouting “Gout!” was all David and Gillian. 

There are other little changes to the dialogue in this scene as well. When Mulder drives Colquitt and Bludworth away with his speech about expecting a wooden stake made from “the three types of wood used in Christ’s crucifixion cross”, Scully accuses him of doing that on purpose. The script has Mulder respond “You’re right, Scully”. In the episode, it’s a much more sassy “Ya think?” And another one: when Mulder talks about fans of Hammer Horror films, his “of which I am one, guilty” wasn’t scripted. And the “Did you get your hair cut? Are you kidding me?” exchange isn’t in the script I have, either.

I love this description of Dr. Luvenis in the script: “His skin is too tanned. His hair is an unnatural golden yellow. The result of a Transhumanist experiment.” I had to look this up. According to Science Digest, “Transhumanism is the position that human beings should be permitted to use technology to modify and enhance human cognition and bodily function, expanding abilities and capacities beyond current biological constraints.” So yeah, that’s what’s going on there.

The Barbara Beaumont show clips are really wonderful, so completely believable as a 1967 sitcom! Nielsen is writing a show within a show, completely different genres, and doing an awesome job of it.

This speech from Barbara about what they’re doing and why was deleted:

 It’s interesting, and gives us some insight, but I kind of like the episode better without it. We’re left wondering a little longer just WTF is going on. 

In the first scene in the Bronx church, Scully tells Mulder she needs some time, they can meet later or he can wait. Here’s Mulder’s response: “Sensing something up with her, Mulder shakes his head as if ‘No. I want to be with you.’ She nods…” This is so beautiful! I love how this script examines their relationship and accounts for where they are after all these years, all they’ve been through.

Oh, this is interesting! There’s some deleted dialogue when Mulder and Scully are sitting in the church pew: Mulder asks, “Why the renewed … interest? You said after the ‘scandals’ that you could never go back.” Scully averts her eyes, acknowledging that she did. Then Mulder continues, “I mean, they handled all that like the Vatican put Cancer Man in charge of the cover up…”

This exchange is completely unnecessary to the story and therefore expendable. I think I’m glad it was cut. There’s no need to remove Scully from her faith so explicitly. 

Then this: after Scully says she’s not sure she believes in miracles, but she needs strength from faith like her mother had, or what Mulder has, she says “I have no answers in my life. For William. For what I want. Or what I need.” This last line is deleted.

In the episode, Mulder responds, “All we have are the results of every choice we ever made. And you hope that at the end, you did the right thing.” The script takes it further, “There’s no higher being that will judge you. (beat) I won’t, Scully.”

With a couple of lines deleted, the conversations stays a little lighter, in keeping with the puppy story, while still allowing Scully to wrestle with her faith and Mulder to add his perspective. 

Glen Morgan brought the song The Morning After to the table. It was the first and only choice for Barbara Beaumont to sing. And what a memorable scene! It plays out exactly as scripted, with the actions interspersed with the lyrics. This is how it’s described in the script, after Warren has stabbed himself: “BARBARA gives another nod of permission with a variety show smile…THE GROUP hungrily swarms to Warren’s body and kneels as the blood pumps over his stomach and onto the floor. Still alive, Warren’s eyes roll up into his head like a fish on a dock.” And all through this, Barbara keeps singing. So gruesome! And “with a variety show smile” is pure gold!

When Scully and Mulder meet Barbara but don’t believe she’s actually THE Barbara Beaumont, there’s a whole rant about IMDB (and Wikipedia too) that was deleted:

This and an earlier reference to Barbara’s son who died from an overdose was also cut from the episode.

When Scully falls through the trap door, Mulder yells “Sculllllaaayyy!” The script actually just says “SCULLY!” but even though this is the first time he’s done so since Existence, David still knew what to do!

Then we come to the last scene. The one where Mulder and Scully finally talk about their relationship. I love this scene. I think Nielsen is right, it feels good, it feels organic, it feels earned, and it feels like them. But there were some complaints about it.

In the episode, after questioning whether they’re together, Scully says she fled. Mulder responds, “If only you’d fled earlier … left that basement office before I even needed glasses.” This caused quite the uproar, with fans pointing out that Mulder was literally wearing glasses in the basement office the moment they met!

I have to come to Nielsen’s defense here. She knew that. The line as she originally wrote it acknowledged that:

But “when I had regular prescription glasses” doesn’t trip off the tongue quite as easily. So here we are.

And that brings us to the whisper moment. Nielsen said she always intended that to be a private moment, and she was surprised how outraged people were to not know what was said. She felt it made sense that Scully would keep it private, in a sacred place. Again, it felt organic. Nielsen wanted the audience to be engaged, needing to think about what Scully might have said.

Here’s how it was scripted:

This works for me. I don’t know if I’ve ever heard a suggestion about what Scully whispered that quite fits with what they said next, but I love to think about it. Let me know if you have a line you think is perfect!

All in all, I think Nielsen wrote a truly gruesome X-File which organically led to Mulder and Scully talking about their feelings. Safe to say, I would definitely want to see more from her.

In the next installment I’ll take a look at episodes written by people who were members of The X-Files family, but not as writers…

The One-Timers

I decided to do a deep dive into scripts written by one-timers, writers who wrote only one episode of The X-Files. My goal was to read as many versions of the script as I could find to see how they progressed and compared to the episodes as they aired. I also looked for any other information I could find about the production of these episodes. I got inspired after acquiring a new batch of scripts, several of which were written by these one-timers. Why do this? Because I just really love studying X-Files scripts! I thought it would be interesting to see if I could draw any conclusions about these episodes and the writers, why they were one-timers. It was also important to me that this is a fairly contained set of episodes, so the project wouldn’t get overwhelming (although I ended up writing so much that I’m breaking this post into installments).  This was just going to be for my own enjoyment, but then I decided I’d really like to share these thoughts, and I haven’t posted to my blog in a really long time, so here it is!

One-Timer episodes:

  • Eve
  • Gender Bender
  • Shapes
  • Fearful Symmetry
  • Oubliette
  • Wetwired
  • Sanguinarium
  • Demons
  • Schizogeny
  • Trevor
  • Orison
  • En Ami
  • all things
  • Kitten
  • Rm9sbG93ZXJz
  • Familiar
  • Nothing Lasts Forever

I didn’t study/write about these in any particular order, or follow any set format. I just wrote out any thoughts that occurred to me as I studied the scripts. For this series I’ve grouped the episodes into three categories, which I’m calling Early On, The Staff Writers, and Members of the Family.

Part 1: Early On

I’m including Eve, GenderBender, Shapes, Fearful Symmetry, and Sanguinarium in this group. For the most part these episodes aired before The X-Files hit its stride. It wasn’t completely clear what the show would be and what kind of stories would be told. Some of these scripts are well-written, by experienced writers, but they just didn’t hit the right notes as X-Files episodes. Sanguinarium is the outlier of this group, written in Season 4 by inexperienced writers, but I think it fits this category best, so I’m including it here.

Eve 1×10

Eve, written by Kenneth Biller & Chris Brancato. I have the yellow revision (11/4/93) and the shooting schedule. The episode was directed by Fred Gerber, also a one-timer. 

From Wikipedia: Biller and Brancato were freelance writers who pitched the idea for the episode to Chris Carter under the title of “The Girls from Greenwich”, with the focus being on genetic experiments conducted on sets of twins. Brancato said the duo decided to do “an X-File with a genetics experiment gone awry” inspired by the film The Boys From Brazil (1978), where Nazi scientists create clones of Adolf Hitler, while finding “our own themes and characterizations to explore”.

Glen Morgan and James Wong rewrote the script after the original draft. Unfortunately, I only have a later revision, so I wasn’t able to compare it to the version actually written by the one-timers.

Teena and Cindy were named after Morgan and Wong’s wives. Maybe this was a way to take credit for uncredited rewrites, like John Shiban, Vince Gilligan, and Frank Spotnitz would later do by inserting “John Gillnitz” into episodes.

There are pages in my copy of the script dated 10/28/93, which is the blue revision. The original draft is 10/25/93. I wonder how early in the process Morgan & Wong were involved. Cattle mutilation is included by this point. Is that a M&W thing? I think of that as an X-Files trope, but this actually may be the first reference to it in the series. By the 10/28/93 revision the names Teena and Cindy were already in use. Also Teena is in Connecticut but Cindy in California, which doesn’t fit with the description of the original pitch for “The Girls From Greenwich”. So I’m going to assume this is a M&W rewrite.

Mulder’s quip “what’s a girl?” isn’t scripted. 

All the maneuvering at the truck stop is in the script–getting the bathroom keys, ordering the sodas, one of the girls poisoning the drinks–except Mulder paying for the sodas! They must have realized they’d forgotten that piece and added it later. I’d love to know who came up with Mulder asking the little Eve if she wants to pay. It’s such a sweet moment, which I’ve always thought of as establishing an important piece of Mulder’s character, this early in the show.

That’s something I need to keep in mind for this deep dive. At this point, it can’t really be said that a staff writer knows the characters more than a one-timer, since there’s so little to go on yet. All in all, I haven’t been able to draw any conclusions from this episode, other than it’s a good episode, which is what we expect from Morgan & Wong.

GenderBender 1×13

GenderBender, written by brothers Larry Barber and Paul Barber (I wonder if they’re any relation to Gillian Barber, who appeared in 4 episodes of the show, most notably as Penny Northern in Nisei and Memento Mori). The original draft was dated 11/29/93. I have the pink (12/5/93) and salmon (12/9/93) revisions.

From Wikipedia: The episode was inspired by producer Glen Morgan’s desire for “an episode with more of a sexy edge”. It proved difficult to portray sex as convincingly scary, which caused the producers to introduce the concept of “people like the Amish who are from another planet.” The initial draft focused heavily on the contrast between the farming community of the Kindred and a version of city life “with very sexual connotations”.

In the opening scene of Act One, Mulder pulls a pair of latex gloves from his field kit before touching any evidence. This seems like a perfectly reasonable thing for a law enforcement officer to do, right? But it didn’t carry through to the rest of the series. Mulder never carried a field kit. He rarely used gloves, and when he did they were just pulled from a pocket. These details would become iconic, but everything was still new at this point in the series.

Back in the office, Mulder talks about pheromones strong enough to cause “a coronary.” This immediately makes me think of Maggie telling Scully in Beyond the Sea that her dad died of a coronary. Does that indicate this is a Morgan & Wong rewrite? Or is that term used more than I realized?

Mulder and Scully notice old photos of the Kindred in the general store. Some were taken down to be reframed, and Mulder asks to see them. Here’s a change between the pink version and the salmon. In the pink (earlier) version, Mulder flips through the photos, he stops “on A PHOTO OF A KINDRED MAN. PUSHING IN TIGHT on the photo, as it dissolves into: THAT SAME FACE staring into a mirror” in the dressing room at a trendy boutique. “BUT AS THE CAMERA PULLS BACK we see that the face is not a man’s face but a woman’s face. Marty’s face.”

In the salmon version, the photo Mulder stops on is of a “KINDRED WOMAN”, instead of a Kindred man. So the reveal that it’s Marty doesn’t include the gender swap.

This scene is ultimately not in the episode, probably cut for time, but maybe for content. Was the change from pink revision to salmon because it was too soon to reveal that Marty was swapping genders? Was there some pressure from Standards & Practices? It’s hard to know. The whole episode is very dated.

And really, this episode just doesn’t work. The pieces don’t fit, it’s not very interesting or exciting, and the ending isn’t earned. It’s easy to see why this team didn’t write any further episodes. It seems like maybe they were given direction from Glen Morgan–something sexy and scary and throw in some Amish-y characters–but I don’t think they were the team to pull it off, if anyone even could. 

Kudos to Rob Bowman, though, for making it look really good, especially the outdoor scenes. And here’s a fun note. The scene where Mulder and Scully are looking for the Kindred compound, using a map, plays out pretty much as scripted. Mulder crumples up the map and tosses it. But in the episode, Mulder then kicks it in the air, and Scully catches it. That little detail isn’t scripted. So either Bowman or the actors added that delightful little moment.

Here’s a thought I had while reading the script. The episode centers around a group of people who shift genders. And they have this hypnotic power in each form, male and female. Yet when placing one of the FBI agents in danger, the script falls back on old tropes. The defenseless female, placed in danger of sexual violence, being rescued by the male hero. If instead Mulder had been targeted by one of the female Kindred–or, gasp, even Andrew in his male form–and Scully came to his rescue, this would have been more in line with The X-Files storytelling. Not to say that the show never fell back on stereotypical gender tropes. It did. But it very intentionally broke the gender normative mold more often than not. If GenderBender was one of those times, perhaps it would have more to offer.

Shapes 1×18

Shapes, written by Marilyn Osborn. I have the green revision (2/15/94). The original draft is 2/3/94. Osborn’s TV writing career began in 1993, when she wrote for Silk Stalkings and The Commish. Morgan & Wong were writers on The Commish as well. That’s likely how Osborn came to The X-Files. 

The network wanted a more conventional monster episode, and Glen Morgan suggested using the Manitou, from Native American mythology. 

I haven’t found any information about rewrites of this episode. I’ve read that every episode went through Chris Carter’s typewriter before it was finalized, and Morgan & Wong seem to have done a fair amount of rewriting in general. But Osborn had some TV writing experience. It’s possible that most of the writing and revising was left to her.

What I noticed when reading the script was that it’s very detailed and descriptive in setting the scenes. I know what everything looks like, as well as the thoughts and emotions of the characters, from these script notes. Osborn is a good screen writer. Indeed, she’s had a long career as a TV writer and producer, including writing credit on 22 episodes of Morgan & Wong’s Space: Above and Beyond. She just didn’t quite get The X-Files. 

There’s a deleted scene in the first act, as Mulder and Scully are driving away from the Parkers’ ranch, where a cow is standing in the middle of the road. Mulder makes a crack about eating steak, and Scully shouts “baseball glove, leather purse” as she tries to shoo the animal away. I’m not sorry that was cut.

Also in that scene, Mulder tells Scully his mother used to say if you felt a shiver, the devil just touched your spine. He says it’s like “the creeps” Lyle Parker mentioned, a presence you can’t see or hear. Scully is annoyingly dismissive. The whole exchange seems like the Scully we met in the Pilot and Deep Throat, but not the person we’ve gotten to know throughout the season. Again, this was a good scene to cut.

As I read through the script I keep noticing how well written it is: 

“Signs of Ish’s occupation as a mechanic and as a productive and positive role model in this great and just land we call America are prevalent. The only working vehicle, an old pickup, sits in the driveway.”

“Ish’s house… reflects the personality of an old hippie pack rat. Cluttered is an understatement. Lots of albums; Neil Young, Cream. Tapestries. Beads. Bongs…. Candles are lit, not for ceremony, but because Ish likes the light they create. This room has a mystic quality, not new age, but eerie and mysterious.”

Osborn knows how to set a mood! I can totally understand why this script was produced. It’s a well-told story, written by someone who knows how to write. She has history with the staff writers/producers. Also, it was late in the season, and they had to get to 24 episodes. Unfortunately, it’s just not a very compelling X-File. It’s not at all surprising that she didn’t write another episode.

Fearful Symmetry 2×18

Fearful Symmetry, written by Steve De Jarnett. I have the white version (1/30/95) and goldenrod (2/7/95). De Jarnett is a film and television director, screenwriter, and short-story author. The director, James Whitmore, Jr., is also a one-timer on the show. Often, early drafts of a script are “Untitled.” For this script, the name of the episode is on the first draft, taken from the Blake poem, clearly a choice by the credited writer.

I’m interested in the small changes between the original and the later revision, often minute details that someone felt the need to clarify. In the teaser, “music echoes off the marble” walls, becomes “music from a ghetto blaster.” “Both men cross themselves” becomes “the younger man crosses himself.” There are other changes–some of the destruction caused by the elephant, the rising sun momentarily blinding the trucker–that were obviously deleted for time/budget/difficulty reasons. But the small ones seem to be story refinement, a focus on details to better convey a mood. Very interesting.

Here’s another change that I find delightful: originally the script says Mulder “steps out of the broken window.” That was changed in the blue revision to Mulder stepping onto the window sill and then hopping down.

This could be what the writer had in mind all along, the revision just specifies. I love this moment, it’s very Mulder, and it’s fun to see it scripted.

A line was added to explain why Mulder and Scully are on the case: “If someone would have seen it, we wouldn’t be here Scully”. There’s also more detail in the later revision about the way Mulder and Scully are interacting, which wasn’t originally specified.

I’m curious whether these changes were the result of notes given to the writer or rewrites done by someone else. Of the principal rewriters (other than Carter), only Frank Spotnitz was on staff at this point. I haven’t found much about the production of this episode, except for the steps needed to care for the animals. But so much of the original script is unchanged that it doesn’t seem like a rewrite was needed.

The script originally had Mulder talking to all three of the Lone Gunmen via video conference. By the blue revision they knew Dean Haglund wasn’t available (he was filming an episode of Sliders that same day) so he was written out, with Frohike explaining that “he has a philosophical issue with having his image bounced off a satellite.” The rest of the dialogue is the same, just redistributed.

This next scene always strikes me as somewhat out of character. I’m fairly certain it’s the only time in the entire series Scully uses the phrase “pisses me off,” and while Mulder often disagrees with Scully, he’s not patronizing.

I know it’s still early on, relatively, but the Mulder/Scully dynamic was pretty well established by mid Season 2 (by mid Season 1 even) and this feels wrong. A case of a writer less familiar with the characters than the regular writers or fans. 

There are other minor tweaks in the first three acts, nothing major. Act Four opens differently, making the interrogation of Willa about Kyle’s death a bit more dynamic. A conversation between Mulder and Scully is added, and scenes are rearranged a bit, building the tension. In the end, all the same information is shared, just in a more interesting way. It’s so fun to see how much difference these sometimes small revisions can make.

This isn’t a great episode. I think it pushes credibility a bit too far. And, while it involves aliens, it doesn’t fit within the mythology of the show. If The X-Files were an anthology it might work better. Story issues aside, the script was well-written by someone who knows how to write scripts and didn’t have as many major revisions as I’ve seen in other episodes.

Sanguinarium 4×06

Sanguinarium, by Valerie Mayhew & Vivian Mayhew. I have the writer’s draft (9/5/96) and 2nd blue (9/18/96). This episode started as a spec script by two fans of the show. It was their first script produced for TV. They went on to write several episodes of Charmed.

The writer’s draft starts Act One with a dick joke, which Standards & Practices axed.

The act starts in the X-Files office with Mulder immediately connecting the death we saw in the teaser to a series of deaths in another hospital 5 years earlier and suggesting some sort of paranormal manipulation. Scully looks for a “less exotic alternative” such as Brief Reactive Psychosis, which can be contagious in high pressure environments and horrific working conditions. We then jump to the hospital where we see very plush carpets and luscious flower arrangements etc., cluing us in that Scully’s theory won’t hold up. 

Scully is very much leading the investigation, not charmed by the location or staff or the available services, as Mulder appears to be. She sticks to her theory, not swayed by what Mulder sees as symbols used in ritual magic.

By the time we get to the 2nd blue revision (and the episode as it aired) Mulder seems very taken in by appearances, “rubbernecking” at an attractive staff member.

And Scully is focused more on her contempt of the medical practice, thinking the problem is doctors taking on too many procedures out of greed. I think the episode is trying to show why cosmetic surgery is such a money maker, how easy it is to convince people they need it, by having Mulder fall under its spell. He is contemplating a nose job, while Scully barely glances in a mirror. To me, this show of vanity seems very out of character. It seems like Mulder is used as a plot device, similar to his fear of fire in Fire.

The first act changes significantly from first to final revision. It substitutes an investigation into the use of sleeping pills for Scully’s theory of psychosis. And it focuses more on witchcraft symbols and actually shows Nurse Waite practicing witchcraft. 

In Act Two of the writer’s draft, Mulder goes to an occult store. The clerk is coming on to him, but he’s oblivious. 

It seems odd to me that Mulder refers to Scully as a “fair-haired woman in my life” yet the fact that she calls immediately afterwards, saying “it’s me” makes it pretty clear he was talking about her. In any event, the scene was cut. 

The entire script is heavily rewritten. Chris Carter did a lot of the rewriting, focusing on the themes of greed and vanity, while Howard Gordon developed several graphic scenes. In the writer’s draft, the episode seems to follow Mulder and Scully step by step as their investigation unfolds. It’s sort of clunky. This is not surprising, given it’s a spec script from inexperienced writers. The final version spends more time with other characters, especially Nurse Waite, and shows more imagination in the way the story unfolds. The bones of the story are the same, but it’s fleshed out very differently. There’s more awareness of the level of production the show is capable of, more show and less tell.

And that’s it for now. In the next installment I’ll look at scripts written by staff writers who only had the opportunity to write one episode…